Monday, September 13, 2010

Monday Microfiction 9/13/10

The second installment in my microfiction experiment.  Let me know what you think...

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"Shooter"  (Jon King)

“Target coming outside. White shirt. In front of the house,” says the spotter.

Check the drop. Check the wind. Blink. Blink.

“1-2-2-0 yards,” reports the spotter.

Thumb the safety. Deep breath. Exhale. Deep breath.

“Cleared to engage.”

Begin exhale…four…three…t-

Crack!

“Target is down.”

Chaos 1220 yards away. Spanish curses and conflicting orders. A lamenting widow runs from the house.

Safety on. Bipod folded. Rifle covered. Spotter up, and checking egress.

1220 yards away, shots are fired at the jungle. A few bullets sing past, but they have no chance. They are already gone…the extraction chopper awaits.

Another day in Mexico.


Previous Entries:

"Awake" (Jon King), 9/6/10

2 comments:

  1. I like these quite a bit. I'd never have thought to try writing a story in 100 words, but they actually end up being more thought provoking than other stories because they leave so much to the reader to ponder. It's a nice change of pace from writers who like to micromanage their stories instead.

    I also think this speaks to the way our society is moving. It's about instant gratification and multi-tasking these days. People don't always want to take the time to sit and focus on hundreds of pages of explicit detail - or carry around a book for that matter. But a quick story that provokes the imagination, can be read easily on any mobile device and can stew while doing other things is a rather intriguing change of pace in storytelling.

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  2. That's a good point about the instant gratification--and it applies to writing them, too. It takes a little while to hone them in, but only a few minutes to write the draft.

    It's a fascinating way to let your mind wander to various subjects. And the delivery is almost like free-verse poetry at times, though that's not really the intent.

    Thanks for the comment.

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